Hundred thousands of kilometers away
Your voice can still warm me up like the sun
I know it’s not logical to continue
But, I just can’t forget you’re magical scent.
I feel you close though you’re so far
When you hang up the phone my heart will continue thinking
That my whole world fits inside this phone
There’s no distance big enough for this love.
Everything is perfect when I feel you so close though you’re
so far
I like the general idea of the poem and it kind of instills a certain melancholy tone throughout the poem which is great because your emotions are being transferred through the words. However, I think the poem is generally too direct. Try thinking of more lines like your second line "your voice can warm me up like the sun", more poetic and a nice simile.
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